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第3章 书信

He that has no friend, and no enemy is one of the vulgars;and without talents, powers or energy.

A Letter of Apology

Dear Xiaoming,

Are you still angry with me?Please accept my sincere apology and forgive me.

Yesterday when I saw the pen which looked the same as mine on your desk, I thought it was mine. So I became very angry, because I thought you took it out of my bag without my permission. Though you said it was yours, I didn t believe you. I said something rude to you and hurt your feelings. After school when I got home and found my pen lying on my desk. I was overcome with regret. I misunderstood you.

Now I am using this pen that caused quarrel to write to you and say “Sorry”to you.

Please forgive me!

All the best to you!

Yours ever,

Li Lei

本篇书信结构合理,句子结构丰富,且运用了许多较复杂的句法、语法。以下几点值得读者借鉴。

1. 第二段中第一句话,仔细分析可发现该句中包含以 when 引导的一个时间状语从句,一个以 which 引导的定语从句修饰 the pen, 且词组 looked the same as mine 用得也很准确。

2. 第二段中由于 yesterday, when, so, though, after, 第三段中的 now 连接词的恰当运用使全文衔接自然、流畅。

A Letter of Thanks

Dear Sam,

On my sixteenth birthday, I felt so happy to receive a present, an English dictionary from you!Thank you, my dearest American friend.

I feel happy that recently I have made some progress in English. The dictionary comes at a good time, for I will learn more English words besides grammar. This is an EnglishEnglish dictionary, and all the words are explained in simple and easy English. I am sure that with the help of the dictionary, I can learn English better.

Thank you very much for the birthday card you sent me. Winter is here now, I sincerely hope that you will come to China next summer. I will show you around our city. It is now one of the most beautiful cities in China.

Well, I must stop now. Please write me and tell me more about your life there.

I hope our friendship will be evergreen!

Yours,

Afang

英语表达虽然简单,感情的流露却是真实动人的。信件分成4段,第1段致谢,第2段表示对这本词典的喜爱和它的作用,第3段再次致谢,并邀请对方来访,第4段是礼节性的贺辞。非常完整得体。写此信的时间是Dec. 10,作者在信中写道:Winter is here now, 就显得很得体,接着的I sincerely hope that you will come to China next summer. 就更显得自如而又顺畅,而Please write me 一句也是典型的美国英语。

A Letter to Grandmother

Dear Grandma,

How are you?I miss you very much.

Although we ve been separated only for a month, I feel it has been a year. When I am lying in bed, your face appears in front of me with a smile and I hear your voice saying, “Lili, you must study hard and often write and tell me something about yourself.”At that moment, I wished I could fly to you and call you“Grandma!”

Now, we ve been busy with our lessons. The most important subjects are Chinese, maths and English. You must think we ve tired. No, you re wrong. Our teachers always have some very extraordinary ways of making their lessons interesting. For example, our Chinese teacher has a new way. Each time before the class is over, we are given a few minutes to talk about some news. In this way, it not only makes the lesson lively but also makes the students aware of some news which they didn t know. So don t worry about my studies, I will do my best.

About two weeks ago, I became an announcer for our school. I m trying my best to practies my Putonghua every day in order to broadcast well.

When I m at home, I help mother do the housework. She often says with a smile, “I have a good daughter. I m very happy.”Grandma, are you happy for me?

OK, got to stop here. I must go to bed now. I hope you can come back very soon. Wish everything goes well.

Long life for you.

Your dear granddaughter

作者以家书的形式向祖母汇报了自己的学习生活情况。行文流畅,有清楚的逻辑层次,体现了作者扎实的英语基本功。

Forgive Me, Mum

Dear Mum,

Excuse me for writing to you and not speaking to you in person, because I still don t have enough courage to tell you face to face a secret which has been in my mind for many days. Do you remember that afternoon three days ago?That day, you let me wash the clothes as you felt very tired. But I refused. You were angry and criticized me. I hated you at the time. So when you were out, I cut your prized pleated skirt. That evening, when you took out the pleated skirt, I was very much afraid what I had done would be found out. So I pretended to be very sad and told you that the pleated skirt got torn through washing. When you heard the news you did not reproach me, but I saw your eyes were wet.

Three days passed. Whenever I thought that the pleated skirt was the only pretty one you had, I felt a prick of conscience. In the past three days, you ve showed loving care for me and never minded my bad temper. You have been afflicted with a lingering disease, and you have changed a lot. Every time I see the pleated skirt which is still lying in the drawer and gaze at your aged face, I feel very sorry—Mum, forgive me, please.

Your sweetheart

书信可以帮助我们表达无法当面表达的思想。Afang有愧于母亲,又没有勇气当面承认,书信便成了最好的交际手段。由于是母女之间,因此,文笔比较随便,称呼也比较亲热,感情真实,用词恰当。某些语言上的运用很到位,点评如下:

(1)隐藏多日的秘密应该用现在完成时。作者很好地注意到了时态。

(2)let 后做宾补的不定式省to, 这种明显的用法应在平时多积累。

(3)衣服撕破了,用 tear。break 一般是指一个整体破碎成若干成分。through 在此表示原因。

A Letter to a Pen Friend

Dear John,

My teacher Mr Alan Roberts has given me your name and address and has suggested that I write a letter to you. He said that you d like to have a penfriend in China.

My name is Xiao Feng. I shall be 18 in December. I am studying at a key middle school in Lianyungang Harbor. At the same time I m learning English form the radio. But my English is still rather poor and I hope I can improve it by writing to you.

I live on the campus but on Saturdays I go home to spend the weekends with my family. My father is a teacher and my mother works in a large department store. I have a brother who is just finishing primary school.

I am interested in sports. I play tabletennis, basketball and football. I also do a lot of cycling.

What are your hobbies?Mr Roberts said that in Australia people play cricket a lot. Do you play?Please tell me what it is like.

I m looking forward to hearing from you. Please write soon.

Yours sincerely,

XiaoFeng

这是一封写给陌生人,希望交笔友的信件。由于双方从未谋面,因此,文笔必须正式一些,从写信的目的出发组织信的内容,用简洁的文字尽可能全面地介绍自己。这样一方面节省对方的时间,另一方面让对方更多地了解自己,以决定是否建立笔友关系。总之,信函的首要任务是要完成交际的目的,围绕目的,选用适当的词语以及决定文字的亲近程度。

A Letter to a Friend

June 1st, 1995

Dear Peter,

We re so glad you re coming to join us on Sunday. Here is how you can find us. We ll have our picnic in the People s park. You know where that is , don t you?After you enter the park by the main gate, walk straight on until you come to a stream. Cross the stream and turn right. After walking for a while you ll come to a hill. Walk round to the other side of the hill. There you ll see a lake. We ll have our picnic there in the small woods by the lake. I m sure you ll have no trouble finding us. Do come!

Henry

这是一封朋友间的书信,省去不少客套话,直截了当地告诉朋友要找的地方,因此使用了不少祈使句。在信的开头直接说明写信的目的,结尾确定自己已说得很明白,所以对方应能不费力气地找到目的地,使文章前后连贯,首尾照应。用词简洁,语言精练,句子长度和结构变化有致。

A Letter to a Friend

Dear Zhang,

Hi!My name is Ruth. I am 18, and in the High school. I got your name through the Student Letter Exchange, and I would like to be your penpal. What is China like?I am very interested to know. I hope to travel there someday. Where in China is your city?My city, Morton, is in the state of Illinois. It is very near to the larger city of Peoria.

What are your talents and hobbies?I like to play soccer and basketball. I also play the piano and the oboe. I like music very much.

What music do you like?I like all kinds, except for American country music and rap. What is your school like?My school is for seventh and eighth grade students, and it runs 5 days a week. My favorite subjects are history, algebra, and science. What are your favorite subjects in school?

Please write to me soon, and tell me about yourself.

Your friend,

Ruth

本文要点齐全,条理清楚,应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。首次给笔友写信要用一般疑问句和特殊疑问句向对方询问情况,还要详细介绍个人的有关情况。

A Letter to a Friend

Dear Mr Deng Yi,

I m glad to have received your money and books. Now I can go to school again. I m very happy and grateful to you for your help and let me say“Thank you very much”. I have been studying hard since I went back to school. I have made much progress in my studies. My teacher often praises me for it and my parents always encourage me to study hard. I have made up my mind to study harder and make even greater progress in the future.

I m looking forward to seeing you, but I have no chance to go to Beijing. Would you please enclose a photo of yours in the next letter?

Best wishes!

Your friend,

Mark

本篇习作是书信体裁,文中所用的时态、语态正确,用词准确,情真意切,表达了一位失学少年的真挚感情。信的结尾写得很得体,符合英文的习惯表达法,体现了作者语言基本功深厚,真正学到了比较地道的英语。

A Letter to a Friend

Dear Jim,

The bearer of this note, Mr. Bao Ming, plans to be in New York for about a month. Besides being a personal friend of mine , he is radio director of a number of to pranking show;and knowing how interested you are in radio advertising, I m sure you ll enjoy meeting him.

I have long wanted you and Bao Ming to know each other, and I m glad of this opportunity to bring you together. I ll appreciate anything you can do to make Bao Ming s stay in New York more enjoyable—and I know he will, too.

With kindest regards to you and Ellen.

cordially yours,

Tom

本文语言流畅。用了较多的语法知识,有较扎实的基本功。结尾用了一系列客气话表示对收信人感谢。

A Letter to a Newspaper

Dear editor,

We all know that frogs are beneficial animals. They can eat plenty of insects each year. When I was very young, I still remember that there were many frogs in the fields and the crops grew quite well. But recently I have always been thinking about a problem, “Do we really treat them kindly?”

A few days ago, I saw many peasants catching frogs in the fields. I wondered what they did this for. Then I came to a restaurant in front of which there was a sign read “Buy frogs at a high price”. I understood this now!Those people caught frogs to make money. I think if this continued, our fields would become worse and worse until the crops couldn t grow in the fields. I even dare not imagine what our world would be like.

I wish all the human beings could save our good friends—frogs.

Yours,

LiMing

该文结构清晰。第一段中最后一句话have always been thinking about a problem中恰当地运用了现在完成进行时。

A Letter to a Good Friend

June 8, 2003

Dear Xu Haiqiong,

How are you?Recently I have noticed that you are unhappy because you can t afford famous brands of shoes and clothes as your classmates do. Here I will present my point of view on this matter.

It is understandable that you don t want to be looked down upon, but famous brands of clothes and shoes are too expensive to buy. Actually, it s not your family s or your classmates fault but due to your own belief. In my opinion, the value of life is not and can not be reflected by what somebody wears. Brands are not important for us students. After all, the main task of us is to study well. We can win respect when we study hard and are ready to help others. Don t pay so much attention to clothes and then I m sure you will get less upset and be happy soon.

Best wishes.

Yours sincerely,

Lulu

本文是一封劝慰信,作者写得合情合理,语言得体。主语从句运用恰当,结构明朗,是一得分亮点。“due to”等词语使用恰当。“the value of life is not and can not...”,语言灵活自然,是本文一大亮点。

Monitor Election

Dear Harry,

How are things going on?

Last Monday our class held a monitor election.This was our first election,so everyone was excited.Two of my classmates,Liu Dong and Wang Hong,took part in the elction.They each gave a speech telling us what they would do when they were elected.Then we voted for the monitor.The result was 28 to 15 in Wang Hong s favor.Wang Hong became our new monitor.The whole class cheered for her,and she promised to do the best she could for us all.

Best wishes!

Li Hua

全文使用的都是简单句型,但能准确地表达所有的内容要点。

1.非谓语动词telling us...的正确使用是一个亮点。

2.take part in...,vote for...,in one s favor,cheer for...,promise to do...等固定短语结构的使用使表达更加贴切。

3.固定句型...do the best sb.could for sb.else 的使用为文章增色不少。

Foreign Teachers Wanted

Dear Harry,

Not long before you asked me to find a job for you in Beijing.Now I ve got some good news for you.

Since the Education Department of the Ladder Company is running an English course for children and adults,they need a foreign teacher badly.Applicants who have won a university degree in education or related field will be preferred.You are a native English speaker,which is your advantage over others.If you are interested,you can call them by 861063719568 or write an email to get more detailed information.And before interiewed you must show your foreign export certification.

Yours,

Liuxin.

能恰当地运用定语从句、状语从句和非谓语动词等复杂结构。表达准确,行文流畅。

英文书信大致分为私人信件(personal letter)和业务信件(business letter)两类。前者通常指私人间来往的信件;后者指单位与单位或单位与个人之间,因接洽工作而来往的信件,主要包括商业信函、求职信、推荐信、请柬等。

英文书信通常包括信头、信内地址、称呼、正文、结束语和签名6部分,它们在信笺中的位置示意如下:

信头;

信内地址;

称呼;

正文;

结尾客套语;

签名。

(1)信头(heading)

信头指写信人地址和写信日期。信头应写在信笺的右上角。先写地址,后写日期。其次序为:门牌号码及街道名称,县、省(州、郡)、国名。

写信日期写在地址下面。日期既可以用序数词也可以用基数词,可以放在月份之前也可以放在月份之后,年份之前要用逗号。如:9(th)July, 2003或July 9(th), 2003。

(2)信内地址(inside address)

信内地址指收信人姓名、地址。位于信笺的左上角,从左边略低于写信日期一、二行处顶格写起。先写姓名、头衔,后写地址。格式与写信人地址的写法一致。

(3)称呼(salutation)

称呼是指对收信人的称呼,应写在信头下方相隔一行处,一般以Dear...或My dear...开头。如:Dear Mum/Dear Wang Bin。写给不知姓名的人通常用Dear Sir或Dear Madam。称呼后面一般用逗号“,”。

(4)正文(body)

正文是信件当中最重要的部分。正文每段第一行向右缩进4、5个字母。

(5)结束语(complimentary close)

结束语单独成行,写在正文的右下方。正式的事物性信件常用Yours sincerely/Yours truly等。私人信件较随便,依据自己与收信人的亲疏关系,用Yours/Lovely yours等。注意结束语后面常使用逗号“,”。

(6)签名(signature)

签名指写信人自己的亲笔署名,一般位于结束语下面一行。如果用打字机,除了打上自己的姓名外,还要亲笔签名,这一点对于商业书信或事务公函尤为重要。